100wc by Nathan Wednesday 4th june

2014
06.04

One cold  day i was running home  (because it was cold ) and i ran thought this brown,old gateway that had been there for 40 years and i saw my friend his name is  Ben , hes got a black car and a lot of toys that he has never played with,  I  think he should give some away to the littler kids at our school. We are in school and having  a fun time inside playing with our friends and then  it was sunny… we went outside to play on the playground, we are going to play bulldog (it is a fun game  when everybody runs not not just two people then stop when 6 people run it is more fun  ) and then it rained  again but but it never would fill like it would never stop raining ,  my teacher said ” i hope it stops soon because i want to go outside to the peace garden  for a tidy “.

One Response to “100wc by Nathan Wednesday 4th june”

  1. hollyb5 says:

    Well done Nathan!

    * Good use of brackets. E.g: I was running home ( because it was cold)
    * Great use of speech! E.g ” i hope it stops soon because i want to go outside to the peace garden for a tidy “

    WISH: Try and use a other word then ‘and’.

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